Hi Ayaz! I think you effectively captured the audience’s attention with your use of relevant examples and an appeal to emotion. Additionally, your use of anaphora with “many people” helped highlight just how many people are affected by the violence. Also, your hand gestures were mostly good but could use more emphasis at times. One recommendation I do have is to ensure the background isn’t distracting, as something like the shadow of the fan spinning can take away from an otherwise great presentation.
Hey Ayaz! You did a great job on this! Your passion showed through and you definitely captured the attention of your viewers. I recommend in the future, start your pitch with an opening question that gets people to lean in to hear what the solution is that you are offering.
Hi Ayaz, I liked how you tried to capture the audience's attention at the beginning of your elevator pitch. I believe it would have been better to show real statistics about school shootings or school fights in the US or Florida. I also liked how you dressed formal and gave a good insight about your business idea. Good presentation, keep the hard work!
Hi Ayaz! I think you effectively captured the audience’s attention with your use of relevant examples and an appeal to emotion. Additionally, your use of anaphora with “many people” helped highlight just how many people are affected by the violence. Also, your hand gestures were mostly good but could use more emphasis at times. One recommendation I do have is to ensure the background isn’t distracting, as something like the shadow of the fan spinning can take away from an otherwise great presentation.
ReplyDeleteHey Ayaz! You did a great job on this! Your passion showed through and you definitely captured the attention of your viewers. I recommend in the future, start your pitch with an opening question that gets people to lean in to hear what the solution is that you are offering.
ReplyDeleteHi Ayaz,
ReplyDeleteI liked how you tried to capture the audience's attention at the beginning of your elevator pitch. I believe it would have been better to show real statistics about school shootings or school fights in the US or Florida. I also liked how you dressed formal and gave a good insight about your business idea. Good presentation, keep the hard work!